Already a qualifying Patreon member? Refresh to access this content.
Subscribe
7 Comments
Oldest
NewestMost Voted
Inline Feedbacks
View all comments
Axel
2 years ago
Oh man I already want more so bad! I love how different all of their personalities and I think you did a great job as hard as you said it was. And a Cameo from Wild Card too that was nice to see. I really like this teams dynamic and curious to see how this story plays out and excited to see Heritics profile soon! Thanks for a great starting chapter Nox!
good story always begins with an intriguing hook !
can’t wait to see who is this new villain – Heretic ! Personally, I hope he will be some handsome muscular man lol but with the hints given so far, it is more likely he is some magical creature like The Imp from some magical place, not so humanly (?😏😏
Also, can’t wait to see who is the infiltrator ! who just cum himself when showing up 😍😍
Maybe it will be a surprise when his identity is revealed ? 😎
The story of multiple characters is usually quite difficult to write… I don’t have useful suggestion to give 🤪 nevertheless, since you did well with “The Imp” story, sure you will do well with this one too 👍🏼
BTW not sure if there is a bigger conspiracy in the future stories to explain the increasing crime activities, but maybe it’s just because the leader hero of Cindra Alliance is too busy on visiting Naifaru Paradise 🤣🤣🤣
it will be interesting to see some familiar faces show up in this short story as well 😎😎
can’t help but wondering how our old hero friends doing recently in Cindra 😜😜
Unlock with Patreon
Oh man I already want more so bad! I love how different all of their personalities and I think you did a great job as hard as you said it was. And a Cameo from Wild Card too that was nice to see. I really like this teams dynamic and curious to see how this story plays out and excited to see Heritics profile soon! Thanks for a great starting chapter Nox!
Keke thank you, Axel! Wild Card is a hero that I really like so… hahahas
Fufufu! I will make sure that this will be an interesting one. Breaking the Unbreakables will be tough!
good story always begins with an intriguing hook !
can’t wait to see who is this new villain – Heretic ! Personally, I hope he will be some handsome muscular man lol but with the hints given so far, it is more likely he is some magical creature like The Imp from some magical place, not so humanly (?😏😏
Also, can’t wait to see who is the infiltrator ! who just cum himself when showing up 😍😍
Maybe it will be a surprise when his identity is revealed ? 😎
The story of multiple characters is usually quite difficult to write… I don’t have useful suggestion to give 🤪 nevertheless, since you did well with “The Imp” story, sure you will do well with this one too 👍🏼
BTW not sure if there is a bigger conspiracy in the future stories to explain the increasing crime activities, but maybe it’s just because the leader hero of Cindra Alliance is too busy on visiting Naifaru Paradise 🤣🤣🤣
it will be interesting to see some familiar faces show up in this short story as well 😎😎
can’t help but wondering how our old hero friends doing recently in Cindra 😜😜
As always : Bon courage et Bon continuation !
Hehe, well, this story’s timeline is just a couple of months after The Imp. You might see snippets of our OG heroes.
Heretic will be an interesting foe with an even more interesting history. But that opens a whole new story so… we’ll get there when we get there.
I’m so glad to hear that I did well with The Imp. It was the second story I wrote and the first long one. I hope I’m still improving!!
Great start for a new adventure! … So excited to read what kind of tortures the heroes will have to face at the hands of Heretic!
ALWAYS Hot, this was didn’t disappoint, cute and sadistic villain — who could ask for more?
Hehe! So excited to see that you are starting on The Unbreakables! Hope you enjoy this adventure!